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Monday, August 07, 2006

Double Date

Location 1. Exterior. Forest.
Close up feet hitting the ground.
Slightly wider shot Guy 1 unbuckles parachute harness.
Reveal 2 more characters. Both are female. both in various stages of parachute unhooking. all three in uniform black.
2 shot Girl 1 in foreground. Guy 1 in back ground. Focus on Girl 1.
Girl 1: You alright, babe?
Guy 1: Yeah.
Girl 1: (as camera pans to other side) "Girl 2?" (insert girl 2 name here)
Girl 2: Golden.
Girl 1: Let's move.

All three move forward.
Girl 1 Picks up something. (maybe ripped fabric or dropped something?)
Girl 1: "Girl 2"?
Girl 2: (takes "something" from girl one) Yeah. (looks away. looking for clues/ signs)

(further along)
three spot 'hideout' (fortress, shack, old building, whatever) (regardless of the outside inside must have large interior.)

hide out entrance has out-of-place door lock. Fortunately Guy 1 is prepared. He pulls lock open to hack in.

Interior. inside 'hideout'. three in a line. Girl 1, Guy 1, Girl 2.

Girl 1 flattens self against wall. Dude 1 (a thug) comes around corner. Girl 1 punches him across face. Dude 1 hits the floor. All three step over him and proceed around the corner.

Guy 1 has electronic finding thingy. He examines it and points down a hall way.

They enter a door. three 'Dude's are in the room. A fight ensues. Quick, extreme close-ups illustrate fight.
Foot kicks gun out of hand. Fist in face. Elbow in ribs. Etc.
Over quickly.

All 'dude's are down. In the center of body pile is a chair. Tied to chair is Guy 2.
Girl 2 approaches Guy 2. Touches face.
Girl 2: (smiles for the first time) Hey.
Guy 2: (also smiling but tired) Hey.

Guy 3 enters. He is dressed like other 4. All 4 are alert. Girl 2 is helping Guy 2 out of chair. ***
He enters with a small army.

Guy 3: Welcome. I wasn't sure you would come.

Girl 1: Our first rule is loyalty remember.

Guy 3: The second rule- Violence only when neccesary.


*** Guy 3: Welcome. I wasn't sure you would come.

Girl 1: Our first rule is loyalty, remember.

Guy 3: (Pulls gun.) Third Rule- No guns.

(other four pull together. general sense of sacrilege in response to Guy 3 holding a gun.)

Guy 3: Second Rule- Violence only when necessary. I was never good at all this.

Girl 2: Yes you were.

Girl 1: Come back with us. You can have a second chance.

Guy 3: I'm having way too much fun.

Girl 1: (shrugs) Alright

Guy 2 ducks. Girl 1 kicks the gun from hands. Girl 2 delivers uppercut to chin. Guy 3 goes down.

Girl 1: (to Girl 2) Tie him up.

Girl 2 moves to tie up Guy 3 when-

Guy 1: Stop. (he holds a gun. aimed at Guy 2)

Girl 2 stops. looks at Guy 1 and at Guy 2.

Guy 2: Why?

Guy 1: This is more fun. ( He shoots Guy 2 in the leg) Much more fun.

Guy 1: stops and falls forward. Girl 1 has thrown a knife into his back.

Girl 1: Loyalty.


V.O. Guy 1: "Girl 1" you killed me.

All characters stop moving. in neutral pose.

Girl 1: (as camera pans back) You deserved it, punk.

Reveal- 4/5 friends sitting around living room playing video game. they are now dressed in jeans and tee- shirts.

Girl 2: You totally deserved it, "Guy 2"

Guy 2: Can we get back to killing "Guy 4", now?

Girl 2: I got your back, baby.

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